Wednesday, May 9, 2012

My Development as a Writer



            Towards the beginning of the first semester my writing skills were not as strong as they could have been because of my experience in high school where I did not receive much “training” in writing.  This had made it pretty difficult for me to write papers and clearly express my ideas, but I am happy to see that I have definitely grown as writer throughout the year and in such little time I have definitely grown as a writer and I am my skills are now better than they were first semester.
            I have never been a big fan of writing and my skills still needed to improve.  Towards the beginning of the semester when I was assigned a paper I would write what came to mind in order to get the job done as soon as possible.  The only time I would change those habits was when I had to do some type of research because it’s something that can’t be made up therefore I would have to actually take my time and work on it.  I have always been pretty confident about my work due to the fact that English has been one of my strongest subjects, but I know that now that I was in college I definitely had some improving to do.          Throughout the first semester what I was extremely scared about what writing really long essays.  I also felt as if my writing techniques were not good enough for the essays that we were assigned.  I was more of the straight to the point person and that made my papers lack details therefore making it hard to get to the minimum length that was required for the papers.  I knew that it would take a while for me to get adjusted to other writing environments and it would not be so easy, but I was definitely up for the task because writing is essential in college and it is something that can help me out in other classes not just English and in the second semester it is something I improved on greatly.
            Now I feel more comfortable about my writing skills.  I feel that I have looked at all the mistakes I have done many times so now I do not make them as often.  I am also more aware of what is right and wrong when writing.  For example, when citing a sources I now know that I should include a quick summary for the reader about the source that I am using so they can have a better understanding of how it connects with my essay and what I am trying to say because in the first semester I would tend to include quotes randomly without giving an introduction.  I am also more confident when it comes to preparing to write papers.  Before I would write down whatever came to mind and turn it in without reading it over or fixing anything.  Proofreading is something I did not really do in the first semester unless the teacher made it mandatory, like an in class activity.  Now I sit and brainstorm for a while before I even star to type this way I know what topics are better and what ideas I am able to come up with.  Something I still need to improve on, but have definitely done a better job at compared to first semester, is giving more detail and cutting my writing into paragraphs rather than a big chunk.  I am used to writing without stopping or interrupting until I’m done, meaning that my final product is a big chunk.  This is not good because it may automatically not attract the reader so I have to learn when it is okay to start a new paragraph.  I have improved on that somewhat as it is seen throughout my essays, but in some homework assignments I forget about it and tend to keep going.  Another thing I need more improvement on is giving more detail, when I write papers I tend to not go so much in depth with my ideas and topics.  This is something that I need to change because giving enough details is something that is extremely important and necessary when writing for example persuasive essays.  In persuasive essays you are trying to convince the reader about a certain topic and you want them to take your side.  It is necessary for you to provide enough details so the reader is left with no doubt that what you are saying is write and therefore they should believe you.  I know I have improved this semester because it has not been as hard to write lengthy essays as it was in the first semester, but it’s something I need to improve because details only make your essay stronger.
            I know that I can become a better writer; all it takes is not giving up.  I could have easily said that I don’t care whether I write good or not but I know writing is everywhere and it is something that is essential.  Having learned all these writing tips throughout the school year will help me in the long run with my other classes.  I will continue to improve as a writer when I take other classes because I know that there will be writing assignments where I can use the skills that I have learned.

Review of Persepolis


A story about strength and survival are two adjectives that can very well be used to describe the story of Persepolis.  Throughout this story we meet a young girl, Satrapi, and her family and we were able to follow them through their journey of what it is like to live in a revolution, the Islamic revolution.  Satrapi starts off as wanting to be a prophet when she grows up, but as time goes by and as many negative events occur she loses her faith in god.  She becomes very interested in the revolution and she begins to, in a way, do her own research by asking any family members and friends about their experience in the Islamic revolution.  She grows up knowing about family and family friends that were arrested, due to the revolution, as well as tortured.  Growing up her life was nowhere near normal; she was restricted from having any freedom what so ever due to the rules in her country.  She was not able to dress how she wanted and even listen to the music she wanted, which is why in the end she is sent away to Austria because her parents believe she can live a better life and once and for all be who she is.
            Persepolis does a great job of showing us that we need to be grateful for the life we have and the environment we live in.  For instance, many of us tend to consistently whine about anything and everything we can, such as we do not have anything to wear therefore we won’t go anywhere or the food that is at home is not the one we wanted.  Instead of focusing on little things like that we should be grateful to at least be able to have clothes we can wear everyday and that at least there is a meal on our table every day.  Another thing we need to appreciate is our freedom, because throughout Persepolis we see that this was one essential factor missing in Satrapi’s life.
            Throughout the story we clearly see that Satrapi has to follow the rules of the society she lives in.  She has no freedom what so ever, she is not able to express herself because she is not able to dress any other way that is not “society approved” and she cannot listen to any music that she likes because it would show a sense of rebellion towards her country and her people.  There is an event in the book where Satrapi decides to go out wearing Nike sneakers and a denim jacket with a Michael Jackson pin because she felt that here was nothing wrong with her wanting to express herself, but she was wrong.  As she is walking, a group of women who were known as Guardians of the Revolution stopped her.  “What do I see here?  Michael Jackson!  That symbol of decadence?”  (133)  one of the ladies said.  This clearly shows us how impossible it was to express yourself during the time of the revolution.  Personally, it allowed me to be grateful for the freedom I have.  I am able to go out and dress however I want without having the worry of being stopped and getting in trouble.  The only thing is to worry about is ‘what do others have to say” but that is nowhere near as important or as scary as having somewhat officers stop you. 
            This story also reminds us to be thankful for not living in such a dangerous and violent environment where living in fear is not an option but rather a feeling that can be seen in everybody.  Satrapi mentions, “Together with the other people in our building, we turned the basement into a shelter… After the bombs and the instinctive fear of death, you’d think of the victims and another kind of anxiety seized you.”  (103-104) To always be alert was something Satrapi learned to live with.  You never really knew when an attack would happen, but you would have to be ready and prepared to not freak out because that could of lead to negative consequences.
            In the end, I think this book does an excellent job at letting us learn abouit the life of someone who lived through hard times.  The way Satrapi makes the book into a black and white comic gives us the sense of seriousness, since there is no color to “brighten” our mood.  And learning about a revolution through the eyes of a child makes us more compassionate.  As mentioned before, after reading this book we are reminded to be thankful for the life we have and the little things that make our lives easier than others.  I would greatly recommend this book because not only is it an easy read, but the meaning of it and the moral you get out of it is something that everyone can relate to and it is something that is important and we can carry that everywhere we go to remind us to be happy and smile no matter what because there is something in our life that we should be grateful to have.

Group Reflection


            In order to complete this assignment my group decided to take different questions that were given to us and split them among each other so that the work is distributed fairly.  There were four members in my group and four questions, but we decided that one of the questions would be answered as a group, so that left us with only three questions so what we did was that three members received a question that we had to answer and one member was in charge of putting the information together in the website.  My task was to answer the question “The public response to this form of media.  How long did it take before it “caught on”?  How popular is it now- how many people use it?  What are the common reasons they use it?”  In order to accomplish my part I used online research.  I found that the Facebook website itself gave me a lot of information and I knew it was a reliable source because it was information published onto the website by the workers of the site.  There were also many interesting articles that contained a lot of helpful information that helped me answer my questions.  I also used my knowledge and what I know as a user of the site to help me answer questions that could not be answered by the simple help of the internet.  My colleagues and I functioned perfectly as a group.  We were also able to communicate and agree with each other’s ideas which made it easier for all of us to complete the assignment.  Even if we had any disagreements I am sure that we would have been able to resolve them quickly.  By remaining in a professional attitude we were able to complete the task without any troubles and in fact we were able to finish pretty quickly.  Our communication was something that really helped us out because when our group member, the person that designed the website, was done adding all the information she asked us to take a look if we wanted anything to be changed we could notify her and she would be able to change it.  This helped improve the appearance of the final product.  In this assignment it was not that much of a difficult task to write something that would include more details, facts, opinions.  The fact that the subject was something that I could easily expand on made it that much easier.  It was the same as writing a text, tweet, or Facebook post because when you write something using these resources the main idea is there the only thing that is lacking is more details.  Details were all I needed to make my writing assignment a success.  I think my cognitive process was not that much different when writing this assignment neither were my writing habits.
            In this assignment I felt as if I had to inform the reader about something so I decided to keep a professional and informative tone, but I only used that when it came to discussing the facts.  Although I kept an “essay type” of tone in some of the writings, it was something that was not so serious because I did not want the reader to be bored and move on.  I wanted to kept it interesting and relatable.  When I answered the other questions that involved my opinion I decided to use a more friendly tone so that the reader could be able to relate to what it is that I am saying.  I am sure that that skill will be successful because when the reader/viewer sees the information they will think “yes that is right, that is exactly how I feel”.  I learned that when writing for the digital world you have to have different tones depending on what you have to say.  Even if you are saying something important, you always have to keep it interesting in order for the viewer to remain on your site bemuse if they get bored then they will move on and look elsewhere.  You want to write in a way that will keep a person interested in your site.  In my case, like I have mentioned before, I kept a professional tone but it was also relatable at the same time.  I wanted the reader to relate to what I was saying so that they could be interested and stay on the website.  This taught me that I am able to be a successful writer by just taking a moment to think about what it is that I am going to write.  In other cases I decided to just go ahead and write without really thinking about what I am going to say and many times that result is negative for me because I quickly run out of things to say.  In this occasion I decided to think about what I was going to say and how because I wanted it to be a detailed piece and something that would be informative but at the same time something that someone would enjoy reading.  I think I have changed some of my writing habits.  I am used too writing so professionally in my essays that sometimes it may come across as boring and it is something that I do not want.  With this assignment I learned how to remain professional but interesting at the same time which is something that will definitely benefit me with other writing assignments.

Public Space: How it really affects us


              Space is defined as “a continuous area or expanse that is free, available, or unoccupied” according to Google definitions.  Spaces that we occupy, such as malls, plazas, parks, etc, tend to be public hence the term public space.  But just because a space is public does it really keep truth to its meaning, in other words since it is a public space are we allowed to do whatever we want? And do certain spaces affect the way we behave? No and Yes.  We do not possess absolute freedom in all public spaces; for example protesting can be disruptive; therefore our behavior should match the intentions of the space.
            As mentioned, we should behave appropriately according to the intentions of the space.  Public spaces affect the way we behave for the simple fact that there is an appropriate type of behavior depending on the location.  John Dixon, Mark Levine and Rob McAuley talk about how moral rules are portrayed in public spaces and they mention, “We have found it more useful to think of public space having an essentially two-sided character, a character that has assumed widely varying historical forms and that continues to shape urban life.”  Basically stating that public space does in fact affect society and the way we are shaped.  They also mention “Teenagers who “hang about” in shopping malls and arcades may be rejected because they violate the consumerist norms that regulate public life in such spaces.”  Basically stating how actions that do not correspond to the space’s intention may make people look bad.
            Some people may argue that space does not influence their personality because it is not possible to change who you are that easily, but they are wrong.  Think about the following scenario: you are out and about with your friends for lunch, the most appropriate thing to do is chat and share a couple laughs.  How do we know this is the appropriate thing to do?  Well if we observe the environment at a restaurant we are able to see people around us chatting and laughing, they are also eating, and having a good time.  This is like a sign telling us that it is appropriate for us to have conversations and do similar actions like the rest of the people there.  The point of doing all that is to have a good time.  But now if you change the setting, let’s say a library, now not only has the setting been changed but the people have to change the way they behave.  In contrast, if you are in a library it would inappropriate to have a conversation or laugh because you have to respect what others are doing.  If we observe the space of a library we know that it is a quiet place, people around us are reading or doing any other work with the least amount of noise as possible.  This immediately sends us a sign that lets us know that if we cannot talk because it would be inappropriate and disrespectful to others.  Therefore this observation greatly supports my statement that space does in fact affect the way you behave.  Like they say, there is a time and place for everything, in this case we are able to see that there is a time and place for the way we behave.
            When it comes to our freedom in public spaces, it is in fact limited.  We are not free to do whatever it is that we please because at the end of the day there is someone that is in charge of the place.  We can take into consideration a trip to the mall.  Although the mall may be considered a public space, it is not a place where you can do whatever it is that you want.  Let’s say you are in the mood to walk in with just shoes and boxers, do you think you will be able to get away with it? It is a public space therefore you should be able to be free and do what you want right? Wrong! The owners of these places, or the dominant groups, are in fact in control of the mall.  What I mean by dominant groups is that they are the ones that make the rules such as owners and managers, they are able to provide a safe environment for all of us and make sure that no one’s behavior gets out of hand.  Although these rules may not be so obvious, because they are not posted all around the mall, it is still something that people know about.  People know because if others get in trouble then they know that they should not do that, in other words they learn from the mistakes of others.  If you do something wrong or inappropriate then you will get in trouble and know that what you did is not acceptable and others can learn from your mistake as well.  For example, I had a couple friends who went to the mall one day and decided to play tag around the mall, I mean why would you not want to do that it’s everyone’s dream to play tag in a place way bigger than your backyard.  After playing for a few minutes security noticed them and they got in trouble and are now banned from the mall for a year.  This is a clear example that in fact the mall is not a fully public space because you are not able to do whatever your heart desires.  But we may think, what if we do not witness the mistakes of others then how do we know what is right and what is wrong?  The answer to this is by observing, as mentioned previously.  When we enter a new place the first thing we do is observe our surroundings so if we enter a mall and see stores we know that it is a place to shop and that our behavior should be calm.  Observing can help us find out the intentions for that certain space.
It is important for public spaces to not be so public because if that was the case, our security could be at risk. The government should be able to decide what to do with these spaces because it is necessary for someone to put order.  As Berg briefly states in “The Occupy Movement and the New Public Space”, “But the public spaces we’re looking at should be more appropriately defined as publicly accessible places subject to the rules of its owner, the government…”  It is extremely crucial for rules to be set in these places or else people will take advantage of their freedom and do whatever they want, literally.  If everyone does whatever their heart desires these places can turn chaotic. People will be people, which means they may do things that others do not view as appropriate.  Berg also states, “Public means us, but it also means the government…”  The government only wants the best for their people which includes keeping them safe and content.  Clearly, these rules would not be anything too crazy and out of hand but just something that can work to keep order.  If order is kept than everyone will be happy because they do not have to feel threatened any where they go.
We can use the example of protests to further analyze this statement.  There have been too many times where protests have gone wrong, such as Occupy Oakland where over 400 people were arrested and much damage was done to the city, leading to the idea that spaces should be used for their initial intention and other activities should have a place where these activities can take place.  There are many times where these types of events take place in places like parks.  The initial use for that space if for families to have a good time, a place where they can enjoy a day away from everything and enjoy beautiful days that nature has to offer.  No one would like to have their days ruined because people feel the need to protest and they have no places to go to.  All of a sudden the place you thought of as peaceful and enjoyable turns into chaotic and extremely noisy.  Not only that, but there could be chance that you may be running a risk of being hurt.  Protests should not be allowed in public spaces because they can turn violent and jeopardize the security of others.  Walljasper gave us an example in “From Middle East to Madison, Justice Depends on Public Spaces” where he mentions, “…people express their aspirations and face bloody reprisals…”  This is a clear example of how dangerous a protest can turn.  The people can be so pumped up and determined to get there mission across that when officials arrive to observe them, they often see it as a threat and as if they will be stopped.  This is when they start attacking the armed forces and a fight breaks out, turning a calm protest into a battlefield.  This is when things get dangerous.  Walljasper also mentions, “…the public spaces where citizens rally to voice their discontent, show their power…”  Once people are in these places they do whatever it is that they are able to in order to be heard and if you come to think about it you never know what people around may be carrying so someone with a gun can pull it out and start shooting causing a riot that can have deadly and unfortunate results.  Another great example would be of a protest in Moscow, Russia where people protested against a television station and reporters Barry and Schwirtz mention, “The only unusual thing about ''Anatomy of a Protest'' was the furious reaction it provoked.”  People were so into getting their message across that they forgot about any inconveniences they could be causing.  They also tell us, “As opposition leaders recover from the demise of mass antigovernment protests, some are looking to television as the next political battleground.” Being so passionate about fighting for their rights can turn negative for those around them as well.  This affects people that are walking by minding their own business can be suddenly pulled into this battlefield and all of a sudden be part of it, just because the person looked like a normal citizen that could be part of a protest.  That is not fair because you are put in a dangerous predicament without anyone telling you and all you were doing was trying to get from point A to point B.
            In the end, we have to keep in mind that when we are in a public space it is important to be civil.  Wherever it is that we may be there is an appropriate way to behave because there is a place and time for things.  In regards to our safety, the only way to have our security guaranteed is to have someone put order in places, such as public spaces.  Our safety comes first and it is crucial for us to not feel threatened or scared wherever we may go.



Work Cited
Barry, Ellen, and Michael Schwirtz. "Russian TV Broadcast Besmirching Protesters Draws a Furious Reaction." The New York Times, (2012): A12
Berg, Nate. “The Occupy Movement and the New Public Space”. The Atlantic Cities. November 22, 2011. Web
Dixon, John, Mark Levine, and Rob McAuley. "Locating Impropriety: Street Drinking, Moral Order, and the Ideological Dilemma of Public Space." Political Psychology, 27.2 (2006): 187-206.
Walljasper, Jay. “From Middle East to Madison, Justice Depends on Public Spaces”. Reading Culture: Contexts for Critical Reading and Writing. Eds. Diana George and John Trimbur. Boston: Pearson, 2012.